Sissorelle
Warrior
I'm am the one hiding under your bed! Teeth ground sharp and eyes glowing red! [H:2]
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Post by Sissorelle on Mar 14, 2007 19:18:31 GMT -5
This Black Sunset
By Sissorelle
Feel the cold upon your face, Feel the hate within this place, Feel the bonds that hold you down, Feel the evils that watch you drown.
Feel the belief you invested in this, Feel the things lost that you'll miss, Feel the anger you place inside, Feel the sanity run and hide.
Feel the faith die within this hole, Feel the people burn in flesh and soul, Feel the iron that gashes the skin, Feel the dark race you cannot win.
Feel the power you stored away, Feel the light fading every day, Feel the fire that burns you now, Feel the control you cannot allow.
Feel the beginning of your end, Feel the wounds that will never mend, Feel the demons that you have met, Feel the bitter, Black Sunset.
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Post by Mistress Rell on Mar 15, 2007 9:43:53 GMT -5
Very dark, almost angst ridden. Reminded me of a Metalica song. I like it.
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Sissorelle
Warrior
I'm am the one hiding under your bed! Teeth ground sharp and eyes glowing red! [H:2]
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Post by Sissorelle on Mar 15, 2007 16:07:52 GMT -5
Thanks Rell, I write more angst poems than anything else, I'm hoping to perfect my technique through some critque.
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Post by Mistress Rell on Mar 16, 2007 9:40:33 GMT -5
There's something to be said about this type of poetry, even this style of writting. There's something about guilt-ridden, self-loathing that's appealing.
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Post by emmalou on Mar 18, 2007 17:53:39 GMT -5
Well done Sissorelle - like the poem!
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Sissorelle
Warrior
I'm am the one hiding under your bed! Teeth ground sharp and eyes glowing red! [H:2]
Posts: 35
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Post by Sissorelle on Mar 19, 2007 20:06:23 GMT -5
That's guys and thanks for reading, I'll surely suprise you with a few more works in the future.
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