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Post by Weird Rob 87 on Nov 23, 2005 1:32:34 GMT -5
I did this with barely any help and yes it does have some langauge, but its mostly based on my hate towards rejection
Here we go again, SciRob of Hellz Warriorz back at it again. I’m feelin’ a hatred towards rejection, Rejection is like an injection that causes Great deals of pain and anger but it only Makes me stranger.
I’ve been looked down, and then I acted like a down clown but I still got the rejection injection. Women seem to want pregnant doges That are rich, but lemme tell ya Something you damn witches, Give a wicked one a chance, Unless you too damn dense to Give a f**kin’ chance!
Chorus: He’s just a down clown Looking for some lovin’ From a special someone But then he gets the rejection Injection and he becomes even Stranger. He’s the down clown And he should be havin’ some lovin’.
I see a woman whom I think Will give some lovin, I slide up red as an oven, with som real wicked clown moving , tryin’ 2 pop in sum grooving’, gives one look and walks off ass shakin’, denied like bacon, tyme 2 get drunk, got Burbon in my trunk. I’m once again feelin’ the rejection injection and wonderin’ when its gonna end for me.
Chorus: He’s just a down clown Looking for some lovin’ From a special someone But then gets the rejection Injection and becomes even Stranger. He’s the down clown And he should be havin’ some lovin’.
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Post by Enchant on Nov 28, 2005 17:43:26 GMT -5
It seems like you are angry with women, recet thing? It is a better flowing of words....I like it, but like I said seems a bit angry....
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Post by Weird Rob 87 on Dec 4, 2005 22:43:32 GMT -5
not really angry per se, just angry at being rejected and its not really a recent kind of thing.
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Post by Enchant on Dec 8, 2005 18:15:41 GMT -5
Oh okay...to me it just seemed that way. I have been known to be wrong once in awhile...lol... Dont tell no one...lol..
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Post by Weird Rob 87 on Dec 9, 2005 17:06:06 GMT -5
lol no worries and be on the look out for somethin in the sci fi writer area.
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Post by Enchant on Dec 18, 2005 8:41:10 GMT -5
lol no worries and be on the look out for somethin in the sci fi writer area. good good....am looking forward to it. ;D
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Post by --Zoey-- on Dec 28, 2005 7:59:45 GMT -5
To be honest this isn't the best piece of writtng I've read, mainly because of the style... but everyones different. A few more detailed adjectives would of given it some imagery, it just doesn't seem to convey the anger/hate/pain I think that it could. Overall it's still a good one
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Post by Weird Rob 87 on Jan 9, 2006 20:59:11 GMT -5
thanks ya much.
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Post by voltage on Jan 23, 2006 23:07:53 GMT -5
I dont understand the rythm? maybe you could post some accents or just i dunno i cant rap so lol
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Post by The Goddess Alexia on Jan 25, 2006 16:57:03 GMT -5
I absoulty love it! Kudos
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Post by Weird Rob 87 on Feb 5, 2006 5:02:02 GMT -5
lol thanks, and when I eventually find a way to make some beats and have a decent recording program, you'll hear me on voice.
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Post by voltage on Feb 6, 2006 12:18:31 GMT -5
Thank you very much.
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