Post by Enchant on Jul 15, 2006 10:24:37 GMT -5
[glow=blue,2,300]DES[/glow]
Entree 1
Author:Drake
Title:Drake/Jake
Entree 2
Author:Britny
Title:What It Comes Down To
Entree 3
Author:Des
Title:Saying Goodbye
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Comments: (in no particular order)
Number 3.
It gripped me from the very beginning. Descriptive, but not to a fault. The characters have a good dialogue and it is well written, very smooth flowing.
Emotional, you can almost see the anger and dissapointment in the young man's face.
It gripped me from the very beginning. Descriptive, but not to a fault. The characters have a good dialogue and it is well written, very smooth flowing.
Emotional, you can almost see the anger and dissapointment in the young man's face.
I think that Entry number 1 is better. He gives much more detail in his fanfiction and he/she had great ideas as to how to tell everyone what the characters were wearing etc. I enjoyed his or her fanfic
Well the first is too long. All that was needed from that entry was the history, the rest I could've done without. The history itself seemed as if bits and pieces had been thrown together as if it were some kind of summary of one character's life. It would be as character information for a RPG but not as a fanfic, so that one's eliminated.
Now for the other two...
Both of them are pretty good. I found the 2nd entry to be well-written and the information at the beginning helped me understand the story more. It's its saving grace because otherwise I found it to be too short.
The 3rd entry was just the right length and the interaction between the two characters was very well done. I could picture the scene in my head and if it can make me do that, then that's a winner for me.
There you go. I vote for entry number 3. Now, hopefully you haven't picked a winner yet and I didn't just waste a good 20 minutes of my time.
Now for the other two...
Both of them are pretty good. I found the 2nd entry to be well-written and the information at the beginning helped me understand the story more. It's its saving grace because otherwise I found it to be too short.
The 3rd entry was just the right length and the interaction between the two characters was very well done. I could picture the scene in my head and if it can make me do that, then that's a winner for me.
There you go. I vote for entry number 3. Now, hopefully you haven't picked a winner yet and I didn't just waste a good 20 minutes of my time.
Well, that was a bit of a long read, but well worth it!
As Entry #1 was a bit long and maybe a little too descriptive, I love the overall idea of Nicholas Flammel's son and his rendez-vous.
Entry #2 let us see a more deeper side of Ginny than portrayed in the novels, and just how much she truly loved Harry.
I'd have to say Entry #3 was the more intriguing. I'm not much for present tense or Hermione/Draco but this piece seemed to fulfill something I never saw before in Draco or Hermione. It seems Draco was so attached to Hermione because no one ever loved him before: not his father nor his mother, and he had so much trouble his entire life and then Hermione, as goddess and a savior, saved him. He really would have done anything for her.
I choose Entry #3, and thank you for including me in the judgement of these wonderful peices!
As Entry #1 was a bit long and maybe a little too descriptive, I love the overall idea of Nicholas Flammel's son and his rendez-vous.
Entry #2 let us see a more deeper side of Ginny than portrayed in the novels, and just how much she truly loved Harry.
I'd have to say Entry #3 was the more intriguing. I'm not much for present tense or Hermione/Draco but this piece seemed to fulfill something I never saw before in Draco or Hermione. It seems Draco was so attached to Hermione because no one ever loved him before: not his father nor his mother, and he had so much trouble his entire life and then Hermione, as goddess and a savior, saved him. He really would have done anything for her.
I choose Entry #3, and thank you for including me in the judgement of these wonderful peices!
I would say Essay 1, it was a very interesting read, well written and had a storyline with it that kept you interested in it the whole way through. I really enjoyed reading through it.
The others were very nice as well. and well done though I'd still have to go with the 1st one.
The others were very nice as well. and well done though I'd still have to go with the 1st one.
My choice would be #2. A lot of detail was given and it was very creative.
I like Number Two the best. The others are great, but to me Two is most well writen and most realistic when it came to the characters. It was Great!
Congrats Des on winning and to all our contestant for participating and doing a great job.